Renji's Birthday

When this was on BF, it was very popular. If you Google searched "renji's birthday", it would be the first thing to come up.
Well, I moved it to dA.
Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 6
Chapter 7

I'm still writing. And if you don't like it, don't bitch about it. Read my comments at the bottom and they might answer any questions you may have. It's just supposed to be a humorous story, that's all.

We wouldn't bitch if your writing wasn't absolutely atrocious.

You didn't bitch about the Syke thing. And maybe you should give me some advice that's not shitty advice, instead of just bitching?
Also, if so many people have like it(not just here but on other sites, besides BF and dA), it must be decent, at least.

KF's a good writer, so stop bitching.

Working on Chapter 8.
Special thanks to Loki for sumthin' in Ch.7, and to Harley for ideas concerning Ch.8.

So much wrong here...

1. It was still awful.
2. There's so much wrong that it goes beyond all help.
3. I refuted the BM Argument of Story Quality many times already.
4. No she is not.

I'm pretty sure you're one of the only people who say it's awful. I've had professionals read some of my work, not this fanfic, but the first few chapters of the Syke thing and some of my dearly departed work. They certainly didn't think it was awful. And they did not think it was amazing either, but it was good, according to them.

If it's anything like that BM thing, they think it's bad, & you're not very good at determining when someone is lying to you. Hell, you ripped off one of the jokes from me, & it still made no sense.

I thought someone like you would know about my skill when it came to telling if someone is lying to me or not, but I guess it's something that people who know me in person would know more about.
And I don't know what BM thing you are talking about.

That godawful story you wrote with BM in it.

ITT: Informed Ability.

Neo, seriously, did you never develop people skills at any point in your life? Not even a little?

When someone tries, it doesn't matter how bad you think it is, you shouldn't just shoot them down in such a dickish way.
At least be useful and contribute something (like a proper criticism) rather than just being an arse all over the place.

My contribution is that she clearly is not a good writer.

Your stuff is very good. Not awesome, but really good.
I know you're better than me, Neo. I accept that fact. And you also have more experience than me. And English is not my first language, so I think I'm a good writer, and others do, too. I'm not amazing, hell, I'm not as good as you, even. But I'm not a terrible writer.

kisukeFan_4337 wrote:

English is not my first language

When I joined this forum, back when I thought they were nice people (because they were. Relatively speaking.), I kept apologizing about my English and they said I shouldn't worry because it was fine. Now I can't make a mistake without Harley being an ass about it. True story. o.o

It could be worse. You could be Paul.

HarleyThomas wrote:

It could be worse. You could be Paul.

Yes, that would be...*shudder*...I don't want to talk about it...

@Tae: My first language is a European language.

So is mine?

@Harley: I wish that wasn't as good a point as it is.

It is.
^That goes for both statements.

You have nice eyes.